Renee : What fun to think that toys might come alive and party every New Year’s Evening! Your use of a simile to describe your warmth like a walrus was very effective. Your story tells much about what happened but little about how your characters felt about their fun New Year’s. Feelings make a story come alive for the reader. This short story has the potential for a very funny longer story when you describe all the mischief that the toys create.
Neha : Good story, good premise and a good ending. A major flaw is the change of tense from present to past.
No grammatical errors and creative skill is evident.
A good attempt
Sandhya : I was a bit intrigued by the expression “warm as a walrus”. I have never come across it before, so I did a Google search on it. I found this very informative article that explained how, indeed, walruses do stay warm in freezing waters. An interesting usage!
Very well narrated. Would have loved to read some dialogue, though. Maybe some talk between you and the toys?
Keep reading and writing.