It's almost that time of year,
When
everybody’s heart fills with holiday cheer.
There
is one person who lives in the North Pole,
Getting
ready to bring joy to every child’s soul.
His
name is Santa Claus and his sack is full of toys,
To
be distributed to all the little girls and boys.
Christmas
Eve has finally come,
It’s
the time when no child feels glum.
Santa’s
all ready to come to the U.S.A.,
With
his reindeer, presents, and his sleigh.
He’s
checking his list to see who’s been naughty and nice,
I
hope he doesn’t bring me a sack of rice!
I
was waiting anxiously for Santa to stop by,
And
leave presents under the tree before saying good-bye.
When
Santa came home, he brought lots of gifts for me,
The
sight of all those presents filled me up with glee!
December
25th is slowly passing by,
So
let’s celebrate with some delicious apple pie.
I
can’t wait for Christmas to come next year,
When Santa will come flying on all his
reindeer.
JUDGE’S VIEWS:
Renee : This is a fun little poem that shows one child’s feelings about
when Santa visits her home. You include
all the elements of the season and leave readers looking forward to next year’s
celebration. Your rhyme is well done,
but your rhythm is a bit off. Each line
should have the same number of syllables and pattern of stressed vs. unstressed
syllables. When you work out the rhythm
of this Christmas poem, you should have the effect that this could become a
Christmas song.
Sandhya : Lovely! Delightful to read a story written in verse. I was amused by the child waiting anxiously for Santa, hoping he doesn’t bring just a sack of rice – clearly worried about the year’s ‘naughty or nice’ quotient!
Very well narrated. Read poetry by R.L. Stevenson, Kit Wright, Julia Donaldson and Kenn Nesbitt (these write great children’s poetry) – it will hone your sense of verse. Keep reading and writing.
Neha : It is a simple sweet poem. The effort at rhyming is remarkable.
There are no errors
Imagination could be better and it is more descriptive in nature.
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